1) What score do you think you deserve?
- I think I will deserve 1 points. Because I have all materials of classical arguments but I should research more to make my arguments strong.
2) What did you do well?
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3) What could you have done better?
- I have to make my arguments connected.
4) Which part of the classical argument did you use the best?
- My narration is good. I t
5) Which part of the classical argument did you use the most poorly?
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6) What's your stragety to make your second draft better?
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2014년 10월 27일 월요일
2014년 10월 26일 일요일
First Draft
Many people are in the circumstance of internet and influenced by the cyberplace. Students research the data on the internet for their homework. A girl does internet shopping to buy her new clothes. Midle-aged couple book a ticket of play for their wedding anniversary. Internet takes a great part of life nowadays without distinction of sex or age. Hence cyberculture has been a issue today, especially internet anonymity - using another name or hiding real name in internet. There are many conflicting arguments about internet anonymity : interenet anonymity is beneficial or harmful. Actually, internet anonymity has more benefits than side-effects and it is needed in Korea.
Information communications network law of Korea was amended in the January, 2007. In the late 1990, internet was spreaded through the whole country. As the users of the internet increase, the adverse effects of internet increase. - verbal violation, defamination and distribution of illegal information. The government considered that internet anonymity is the most biggest factor of these situation. For that reason, The Department Of Justice added the article of name verification in information communications network law. However, In 2010, the constitutinal court of Korea gave a verdict that internet anonymity is conflicted with the constitution of Korea. They argued that they recognize legitimacy of purpose of the legislation and suitability of way, but the law limited the freedom of expression. In constitution of Korea, there is article that the government should guarantee freedom of expression. They said that there is no specific public interest effect to justify the limitation of freedom of expression, which is the value of constitution.
There are reasons why internet anonymity is needed in Korea in two aspects. One of the reasons is constitutional reason. As mentioned in the narration, internet anonymity is against the constitution. According to Article 1 of 21 of the Constitution, the citizen has a duty to be guaranteed freedon of expression. Freedom of expression is basic essential human rights. It has to be guaranteed because it is the basic requirements of existence and development of the country. People express their opinion anonymously or in pseudonym to express their own idea without restriction. It makes criticism of the power of country or majority opinion of society can be possible. Anonymity in internet is combined with speed and reciprocality of internet and overcome the hierarchical structure of economy. Thus it can develop the democracy of Korea. Internet anonymity is important thing because of that reason.
Universality is one of the reason. Most governments of the country do not regulate about internet anonymity. However, Korea is nearly only country that make a law to restrict the internet anonymity - except autocracy countries such as North Korea and Iran. The most characteristic feature of internet society is openness. In other words, everyone can reach the cyberspace regardless of border. Our own regulation of interent anonymity is far away from the regulation of internet anonymity in foriegn country. It is only the cause that accomplish the public interest.
It is true that internet anonymity has some side-effects. There are some people who argue that internet anonymity can increase using of abuse. According to study of Woo Ji Suk, Na Hyun Soo and Choi Jung Min, there is no specific results that internet anonymity is effective. After using internet anonymity policy, there is little decreasement of using abuse and slander. It is hard to argue that internet anonymity plays a important role. Without the certain effects of internet anonymity, it is difficult to ignore the freedom of expression and claim internet anonymity. The most important thing is that that side-effects are not remarkable than benefits in Korea. In Korea, internet has been developed since the latter 1990s. It is developed at a surprisingly fast pace, and level of Korea internet is ranked in top. In this situation, it is difficult to say that the main reason of cyberabuse and cybercrime is internet anonymity. The benefits of internet anonymity is more remarkable than its side-effects.
Internet is opened place and everyone regardless of ages and sex can reach cyberspace. Openness is the most remarkable feature of internet, and internet anonymity is the most important rule that should be guaranteed in cyberspace. Internet anonymity is helpful to make people express their opinions. Expression of one's opinion is the basic essence today and it can be assured with internet anonymity. For that reasons, internet anonymity is obviously needed in Korea to make assure that people can express their opinion without restriction.
Anonymity is not something which was invented with the internet. Anonymity is developed through the history. It has been used in many purposes. A well-known person did not use a real name to write messages, where the person does not want people's preconception of the real author color their perception of the message. Also other people want to hide certain information about themselves in order to achieve a more unbiased evaluation of their messages. For example, in history it has been common that women used male pseudonyms, and for Jews to use pseudonyms in societies where their religion was persecuted. Anonymity is often used to protect the privacy of people, for example when reporting results of a scientific study, when describing individual cases. Many countries even have laws which protect anonymity in certain circumstances.
Information communications network law of Korea was amended in the January, 2007. In the late 1990, internet was spreaded through the whole country. As the users of the internet increase, the adverse effects of internet increase. - verbal violation, defamination and distribution of illegal information. The government considered that internet anonymity is the most biggest factor of these situation. For that reason, The Department Of Justice added the article of name verification in information communications network law. However, In 2010, the constitutinal court of Korea gave a verdict that internet anonymity is conflicted with the constitution of Korea. They argued that they recognize legitimacy of purpose of the legislation and suitability of way, but the law limited the freedom of expression. In constitution of Korea, there is article that the government should guarantee freedom of expression. They said that there is no specific public interest effect to justify the limitation of freedom of expression, which is the value of constitution.
There are reasons why internet anonymity is needed in Korea in two aspects. One of the reasons is constitutional reason. As mentioned in the narration, internet anonymity is against the constitution. According to Article 1 of 21 of the Constitution, the citizen has a duty to be guaranteed freedon of expression. Freedom of expression is basic essential human rights. It has to be guaranteed because it is the basic requirements of existence and development of the country. People express their opinion anonymously or in pseudonym to express their own idea without restriction. It makes criticism of the power of country or majority opinion of society can be possible. Anonymity in internet is combined with speed and reciprocality of internet and overcome the hierarchical structure of economy. Thus it can develop the democracy of Korea. Internet anonymity is important thing because of that reason.
Universality is one of the reason. Most governments of the country do not regulate about internet anonymity. However, Korea is nearly only country that make a law to restrict the internet anonymity - except autocracy countries such as North Korea and Iran. The most characteristic feature of internet society is openness. In other words, everyone can reach the cyberspace regardless of border. Our own regulation of interent anonymity is far away from the regulation of internet anonymity in foriegn country. It is only the cause that accomplish the public interest.
It is true that internet anonymity has some side-effects. There are some people who argue that internet anonymity can increase using of abuse. According to study of Woo Ji Suk, Na Hyun Soo and Choi Jung Min, there is no specific results that internet anonymity is effective. After using internet anonymity policy, there is little decreasement of using abuse and slander. It is hard to argue that internet anonymity plays a important role. Without the certain effects of internet anonymity, it is difficult to ignore the freedom of expression and claim internet anonymity. The most important thing is that that side-effects are not remarkable than benefits in Korea. In Korea, internet has been developed since the latter 1990s. It is developed at a surprisingly fast pace, and level of Korea internet is ranked in top. In this situation, it is difficult to say that the main reason of cyberabuse and cybercrime is internet anonymity. The benefits of internet anonymity is more remarkable than its side-effects.
Internet is opened place and everyone regardless of ages and sex can reach cyberspace. Openness is the most remarkable feature of internet, and internet anonymity is the most important rule that should be guaranteed in cyberspace. Internet anonymity is helpful to make people express their opinions. Expression of one's opinion is the basic essence today and it can be assured with internet anonymity. For that reasons, internet anonymity is obviously needed in Korea to make assure that people can express their opinion without restriction.
Week 10. Conclusion
My Conclusion 1.
Internet is opened place and everyone can reach cyberspace. Openness is the most remarkable feature of internet, and internet anonymity is the important rule that should be guaranteed in cyberspace. Internet anonymity is helpful to make people express their opinions. Expression of one's opinion is the basic essence today and it can be assured with internet anonymity. Internet anonymity is obviously needed in Korea to make assure that people can express their opinion without restriction.
My Conclusion 2.
Internet is opened place and everyone regardless of ages and sex can reach cyberspace. Openness is the most remarkable feature of internet, and internet anonymity is the most important rule that should be guaranteed in cyberspace. Internet anonymity is helpful to make people express their opinions. Expression of one's opinion is the basic essence today and it can be assured with internet anonymity. For that reasons, internet anonymity is obviously needed in Korea to make assure that people can express their opinion without restriction.
Internet is opened place and everyone can reach cyberspace. Openness is the most remarkable feature of internet, and internet anonymity is the important rule that should be guaranteed in cyberspace. Internet anonymity is helpful to make people express their opinions. Expression of one's opinion is the basic essence today and it can be assured with internet anonymity. Internet anonymity is obviously needed in Korea to make assure that people can express their opinion without restriction.
My Conclusion 2.
Internet is opened place and everyone regardless of ages and sex can reach cyberspace. Openness is the most remarkable feature of internet, and internet anonymity is the most important rule that should be guaranteed in cyberspace. Internet anonymity is helpful to make people express their opinions. Expression of one's opinion is the basic essence today and it can be assured with internet anonymity. For that reasons, internet anonymity is obviously needed in Korea to make assure that people can express their opinion without restriction.
2014년 10월 25일 토요일
Research 2 : Anonymity on the internet
Source
Anonymity on the internet
http://people.dsv.su.se/~jpalme/society/anonymity.html
What I hope to learn from this topic
I want to give readers background knowledge about anonymity before interenet and argue that anonymity is not something which was invented with the internet.
Note
Anonymity is not something which was invented with the Internet. Anonymity and pseudonymity has occurred throughout history. For example, William Shakespeare is probably a pseudonym, and the real name of this famous author is not known and will probably never be known.
Anonymity on the internet
http://people.dsv.su.se/~jpalme/society/anonymity.html
What I hope to learn from this topic
I want to give readers background knowledge about anonymity before interenet and argue that anonymity is not something which was invented with the internet.
Note
Anonymity is not something which was invented with the Internet. Anonymity and pseudonymity has occurred throughout history. For example, William Shakespeare is probably a pseudonym, and the real name of this famous author is not known and will probably never be known.
Anonymity has been used for many purposes.
A well-known person may use a pseudonym to write messages, where the person does not want people's preconception of the real author color their perception of the message.
Also other people may want to hide certain information about themselves in order to achieve a more unbiased evaluation of their messages. For example, in history it has been common that women used male pseudonyms, and for Jews to use pseudonyms in societies where their religion was persecuted.
Anonymity is often used to protect the privacy of people, for example when reporting results of a scientific study, when describing individual cases.
Many countries even have laws which protect anonymity in certain circumstances. Examples:
A person may, in many countries, consult a priest, doctor or lawyer and reveal personal information which is protected. In some cases, for example confession in catholic churches, the confession booth is specially designed to allow people to consult a priest, without seeing him face to face.
The anonymity in confessional situations is however not always 100 %. If a person tells a lawyer that he plans a serious crime, some countries allow or even require that the lawyer tell the police. The decision to do so is not easy, since people who tell a priest or a psychologist that they plan a serious crime, may often do this to express their feeling more than their real intention.
Many countries have laws protecting the anonymity of tip-offs to newspapers. It is regarded as important that people can give tips to newspapers about abuse, even though they are dependent on the organization they are criticizing and do not dare reveal their real name.
Advertisement in personal sections in newspapers are almost always signed by a pseudonym for obvious reasons.
Final thoughts
I think it is good information to argue that anonymity is existed before interent is invented so it makes opponents hard to argue that interenet anonymity is not natural.
2014년 10월 6일 월요일
Week 9. Refutation and Concession
1. What is my thesis?
Internet anonymity is needed in Korea.
2. What is the opposite position?
Internet anonymity is not needed in Korea.
3. What arguments can I anticipate?
1) internet anonymity can restrict the using of abuse in internet
2) side-effect is bigger than benefits
4. How will I counter those arguments?
1) not true. no specific results.
2) not always true. benefits are bigger than side-effect in Korea society
My Refutation and Concession
It is true that internet anonymity has some side-effects. There are some people who argue that internet anonymity can increase using of abuse. According to study of Woo Ji Suk, Na Hyun Soo and Choi Jung Min, there is no specific results that internet anonymity is effective. After using internet anonymity policy, there is little decreasement of using abuse and slander. It is hard to argue that internet anonymity plays a important role. Without the certain effects of internet anonymity, it is difficult to ignore the freedom of expression and claim internet anonymity. The most important thing is that that side-effects are not remarkable than benefits in Korea. In Korea, internet has been developed since the latter 1990s. It is developed at a surprisingly fast pace, and level of Korea internet is ranked in top. In this situation, it is difficult to say that the main reason of cyberabuse and cybercrime is internet anonymity. The benefits of internet anonymity is more remarkable than its side-effects.
Internet anonymity is needed in Korea.
2. What is the opposite position?
Internet anonymity is not needed in Korea.
3. What arguments can I anticipate?
1) internet anonymity can restrict the using of abuse in internet
2) side-effect is bigger than benefits
4. How will I counter those arguments?
1) not true. no specific results.
2) not always true. benefits are bigger than side-effect in Korea society
My Refutation and Concession
It is true that internet anonymity has some side-effects. There are some people who argue that internet anonymity can increase using of abuse. According to study of Woo Ji Suk, Na Hyun Soo and Choi Jung Min, there is no specific results that internet anonymity is effective. After using internet anonymity policy, there is little decreasement of using abuse and slander. It is hard to argue that internet anonymity plays a important role. Without the certain effects of internet anonymity, it is difficult to ignore the freedom of expression and claim internet anonymity. The most important thing is that that side-effects are not remarkable than benefits in Korea. In Korea, internet has been developed since the latter 1990s. It is developed at a surprisingly fast pace, and level of Korea internet is ranked in top. In this situation, it is difficult to say that the main reason of cyberabuse and cybercrime is internet anonymity. The benefits of internet anonymity is more remarkable than its side-effects.
Week 8. The Confirmation
1. What is my thesis?
Internet anonymity is needed in Korea.
2. What types of source am I using to defend my thesis?
The constitution of Korea
http://www.law.go.kr/lsInfoP.do?lsiSeq=61603&efYd=19880225#0000
Research of effectiveness of internet anonymity
http://www.google.co.kr/url?sa=t&rct=j&q=&esrc=s&source=web&cd=6&ved=0CDEQFjAF&url=http%3A%2F%2Fwww.kinternet.org%2Fdown_file3%2Fdown_file.php%3Fbname%3Dtotal_pds%26idx%3D1248%26fcount%3D1%26filename%3D1938384994_0d6de47d_1&ei=6tFMVKGBC8e68gWwy4HAAw&usg=AFQjCNGOsCMRJGelyVMZTaSwsPgc2rHxWw&sig2=NPb8SV3LZQaOshZCYJqZDg&bvm=bv.77880786,d.dGc&cad=rjt
3. Are my arguments mostly based on evidence, logic or emotion?
My arguments are mostly based on logic. My arguments have studies to support my reasons. But it is not enough.
My Confirmation
There are reasons why internet anonymity is needed in Korea in two aspects. One of the reasons is constitutional reason. As mentioned in the narration, internet anonymity is against the constitution. According to Article 1 of 21 of the Constitution, the citizen has a duty to be guaranteed freedon of expression. Freedom of expression is basic essential human rights. It has to be guaranteed because it is the basic requirements of existence and development of the country. People express their opinion anonymously or in pseudonym to express their own idea without restriction. It makes criticism of the power of country or majority opinion of society can be possible. Anonymity in internet is combined with speed and reciprocality of internet and overcome the hierarchical structure of economy. Thus it can develop the democracy of Korea. Internet anonymity is important thing because of that reason.
Universality is one of the reason. Most governments of the country do not regulate about internet anonymity. However, Korea is nearly only country that make a law to restrict the internet anonymity - except autocracy countries such as North Korea and Iran. The most characteristic feature of internet society is openness. In other words, everyone can reach the cyberspace regardless of border. Our own regulation of interent anonymity is far away from the regulation of internet anonymity in foriegn country. It is only the cause that accomplish the public interest.
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